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A slew of good intentions under a pile of broken dreams
The same anxieties return as my mind runs through different scenes
In each one I differ slightly, only on the outside do I vary
Each variation, its own nightmare, reveals fear I still carry
These fears are hard to face for they are lasting and abhorrent
The voice inside my head says they're nothing, but I'm forced to ignore it
I don't know if I'm the liar or if the liar is that voice
All I know is that when the bottles are refilled, I will not have a choice
Unless you know me personally, you won't fully understand this poem. Face value it's a decent poem but, unless you know exactly what this poem is about, you won't completely grasp what this is saying without the story behind it. If you really want the story behind this then send me a note and I'll somewhat vaguely explain it to you. =)
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reminds me of me. anxious/depressed, obsessing over thoughts that feel like they arent your own, and you want them out.....maybe, maybe not...but thats what I think of. Me.
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JubliantTroo Jul 3, 2012  Student Digital Artist
A very touching, stirring poem. Great choice of words and it's written amazingly well.
The descriptions of the feeling are very lively and detailed, making this poem so very agitating.
The length of it is great too, and the end is very strong and well chosen.
Very profound writing- wonderful work.
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WriteTimeWrongPlace Jul 3, 2012  Student Photographer
Thank you. Your feedback means a lot =)
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JubliantTroo Jul 3, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Aww, thank you! And you're very welcome.
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WingiLDesigns Jul 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beautiful photo to go with a absolutely wonderful poem :)
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WriteTimeWrongPlace Jul 2, 2012  Student Photographer
Thank you! I'm actually a bit self-conscious when it comes to my writing, so that really means a lot.
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WingiLDesigns Jul 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
awww no need to be self-conscious...i admire writers since i used to do it alot before i got the worst case of writer's block and not written much in years hehe
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eviltab Jun 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Almost looks like a winged-creature. Dig the composition and the mood of the color.
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WriteTimeWrongPlace Jun 29, 2012  Student Photographer
Thanks!
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